麻烦各位 英语好的 帮我看下 我写的英语专业8级作文 看看有没有语法错误 逻辑问题 以及其他的方面
谢谢大家！
1.英语专业是否应该使用全英文教学
When asked about the topic whether the students whose majors are English should be educated in English instead of Chinese, quite a few people think it is difficult for students to adapt this educational model. But other people hold that it is good way to educate them. Personally, I agree on the latter one.
To students whose specializations are English, English education is essential to them. On one hand, when they begin learning English, the first thing they have to do is to adapt the English atmosphere. Thus, they need to listen and speak it frequently. Therefore, English education is an effective way. They can continuously listen and go over the key knowledge so that they will never forget it easily. On the other hand, sometimes using mother language to teach is not as effective as using English. Some important Knowledge can only be explained clearly through English itself instead of Chinese. As we all know , there are many differences between these two languages such as the logic , grammar and so on. These evidence can prove that using mother language is likely to confuse the students ,which may affect them to learn the language.
Therefore , it is safe to draw the conclusion that it is wise to teach the students in English. If some students are unable to adapt to the way quickly. I suggest that teachers can use some simple words or sentences to help them adapt the English atmosphere.
2.什么是合格的大学生
Nowadays, what a qualified college students should command has been becoming a hot topic in society. Therefore, the opinions are varying from person to person. Some argue that a student who is just able to finish his or her diploma program in college is qualified. But others hold that a qualified student not only can graduate successfully but also have good learning and communication capability. For my part, I’m in support of the latter.
On one hand, it is no deny that nowadays society demands students who have strong ability to get along with their co-workers, which helps them adapt to the working environment easily. If they don’t have the ability, it is difficult for them to work with their colleagues. Badly they ,may resign because of the reasons like having no ability to get along with co-workers. On the other hand, a qualified students should have strong learning ability. After entering the society, there lots of thing are needed to learn. Although they have finished their major courses in colleges, the knowledge they learned from schools is not enough. Undeniably, they have to learn some things from the society or by themselves. Otherwise, they will be given up by society.
Therefore, it is safe to draw the conclusion that as a qualified college student , they not only can complete his or her college diploma programs but also have good studying and communication ability, which is vital to every college students.
第一段 英语专业是否应该使用全英文教学
1、表达太罗嗦了，比如英语专业直接用English Major就行了；
2、观点太过于泛泛，如 用英语教学好处就是可使学生一直处于英语听说环境中，然后没有深入再说，至于汉语会怎么样，不提都可以；
3、句式过于间接，并且单一，作为英语专业的学生，应该把所学的句式都用上才好，你的句式都是最简单的主谓宾形式，最多加个副词；
4、文中尽量避免出现第一人称。
第二段 什么是合格的大学生
1、内容空洞，谢了好几段，其实表达的都是一句话的意思，重复了；
2、所选用的词也基本都是重复，能力可以用ability，capability，skills等，你也可以用些形容词或动词来表达，如capable，competent，enable等，
3、基本语法错误改改，a qualified students? After entering the society, there lots of thing are needed to learn？诸如上述等。
总而言之，你的文章重复及相似内容太多了。给人感觉没有可读性，看完头两句，后面的就不想看。在句式上多下功夫，多加些连接词让你的句子更丰满一些。,
