我马上要参加考研复试了,自己写了一篇英语自我介绍,请英语水平高的网友帮忙改改,万分感谢!

Good morning,dear professors! I am glad to be here for this interview. First let me introduce myself. My name is Lili. I come from Zhangjiakou, Hebei Province. I graduated from Hebei Normal University, majoring in the application of electronic technology. After graduation from the University, I have been working in the NO.1 senior middle school of Shacheng. In the first seven years, I taught physics,then I went to be working in physics laboratory until now.I learnt a lot from my job .However, I think further study is still urgent for me to realize self-value.Life is precious. I wang to seize any chance for self-development. The reason why I choose this research direction is that I want to make full use of my knowledge and ability to serve disabled people.
I am open-minded, quick in thought and willing to help others. In my spare time, I have broad interests like other young people. I like rope skipping, singing, music and so on.
I believe working hard will finally accepted.If I'm given a chance to study in this famous university, I will spare no effort to be a qualified graduate student. That's all about me. Thank you!

个人意见,只做报考。1.为什么叫Lili..用中文名好点吧。2.那句after graduation...感觉好怪,前边说过的,就说after that, 然后继续说。3.in the first 7years,听着别扭,把时间放在后边i ......for 7 years. 4.i went to be working。。为什么用这种时态,用过去时就可以了吧. i worked in....。 4.any chance的any 改成every你这是肯定句,用every.5.chance for self-improvement.我不肯定用for做介词对不对,不过用to improve myself.肯定比你那句容易懂。这是口语,不是写文章,以容易听懂为好。个人意见
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第1个回答  2014-03-28
早上好,亲爱的教授!我很高兴能来到这里面试。首先让我介绍一下我自己。我叫莉莉。我来自张家口,河北省。我毕业于河北师范大学,在应用电子技术专业。大学毕业后,我一直在第一高级中学的沙城工作。在最初的七年,我教过物理,然后我就可以工作在物理实验室,直到现在。从工作中我学到了很多。然而,我认为进一步的研究仍然是迫切需要我实现self-value.life是珍贵的。我想抓住任何自我发展的机会。我为什么选择这一研究方向的原因是,我想充分利用我的知识和为残疾人服务的能力。
我心胸开阔,思想和乐于助人快。在我的业余时间,我有广泛的利益,像其他年轻人一样。我喜欢跳绳,唱歌,音乐等。
我相信努力工作将最终接受了。如果我有机会在这个著名的大学学习,我将不遗余力地做一个合格的研究生。这是关于我的一切。谢谢!
这是翻译过来的
第2个回答  2014-03-27
是不是短了些呢。。
第3个回答  2014-03-27
其实很多时候导师不会要你说英语的,专业知识多准备一点,这个念不好不会减你多少分。
第4个回答  2014-03-27
去英音吧找个人念一念,然后跟着练
第5个回答  2014-03-27
前面可省,直接说名字即可,尽量控制在一分钟内。
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