急~~急~~！哪位高手帮我修改一下英语作文啊！
I like sports at present, but I didn’t like it in the past. I became interested in skiing from the year 2006.There was a very big snow in that year. All grounds were covered by snow. It was so excited that I have never seen the big snow. Although I was live in north. To my surprised, my sister decided to take me skiing. I have never skiing. It was too difficult for me. I was very scared. But when I stood on the ski filed, I was deeply impressed by those people flying on the ski filed. They are so free, relax, happy. From that moment I made up my mind to learn skiing. But it was so difficult to me. My sister only tells me one words: Make it by yourself, if I help you, you will not to learn it forever. As a beginner, I don’t know how to use the snowshoe and ski pole. So I’m practiced in a short ski filed. Although I am very careful, I still fallen many times. It’s very sore. I really wanted to give up. But when I saw so many people interest it, I told myself I must learn it and play it very well. After that, I didn’t care about hurt. I practiced repeat. Finally, I can skiing very well. I’m very happy. When I stood the formal ski filed. I’m very excited. When I skiing, the feeling like flying. It made me relax, free. That day is a memorable for me, I’ll never forget it. It told me one words: Nothing is impossible in the world.
It was so excited that I have never seen the big snow改为i was
so excited because······
my sister decided to take me skiing.句型take sb to do sth
I have never skiing过去完成时改为i had never
I was very scared scared是由于某样恐怖的东西吓到，这儿应该用afraid
I was deeply impressed by those（who） people flying on the ski filed.
But it was so difficult to me前面你都知道用for为啥这儿要用to
Make it by yourself 改为do it by yourself
if I help you, you will not to learn it forever.should could will 等词后面姐动词原形应该改为you won`t learn forever
As a beginner,改为at the beginning.多记一下短语啊
I don’t know how to use the snowshoe 你只穿一只鞋吗？？snowshoes
So I’m practiced in a short ski filed去掉am 动词重复
But when I saw so many people interest it改为but when i saw so many people are interested in it。记住短语,前面你都写对了的啊be interested in
didn’t care about hurt,hurt改为pain。hurt是动词在这儿用名词
I practiced repeat 。repeat改为repeatly,practice是动词在这儿需要副词修饰
I’m very happy.i was very happy过去时！！！
I’m very excited. i was very excited理由同上
When I skiing, the feeling like flying.改为when i am skiing,i feel i am flying.
It made me relax.it made me relaxed注意词的词性
大概我找到的错误就是这些，可能还有我没发现的。但我的建议是，你要读啦。培养自己的语感，你有很多中式句子，只是说你用一个一个英文单词说了出来，并没表达出来。我是中国人我能懂，外国人就会一团雾水啦。
it - them
snow - snow storm
in that year - that year
all grounds were - the ground was
excited that - exciting because
have never - had never
the big snow - such heavy snow
although I was live in north - （改成跟上一句相连）even though I lived in the north
surprised - surprise
have never skiing - had never been skiing
ski field - ski hills
on the ski field - down the ski hills
are - were
relax, happy - relaxed and happy
from that moment - fro that moment on
learn skiing - learn to ski
so difficult to me - very difficult for me
tells - told
one words - these words
Make it by yourself, if I help you, you will not to learn it forever. - 意思不太明白
don't - didn't
snowshoe - skis
I'm practiced - practiced
in a short ski field - on a short ski hill
am - was
falled - fell
interest - interested in
must - had to
play - do
hurt - getting hurt
repeat - repeatedly
can skiing - could ski
I'm - I was
stood the formal ski filed - stood on top of the formal ski hill
I'm - I was
skiing - ski
the feeling like flying - it was like I was flying
relax, free - relaxed and free
one words - one thing
已经修改了，以下就是：
I like sports at present, but I didn’t in the past. I became interested in skiing from the year 2006.There was a very big snow in that year. All grounds were covered by snow. It was so excited that I had never seen such big snow. Although I lived in north. To my surprise, my sister decided to ski with me. I had never skied. I was very scared because it was too difficult for me. But when I stood on the ski filed, I was deeply impressed by those people who was flying on the ski filed. They were quite free, relax, happy. From that moment I made up my mind to learn skiing though it was difficult. My sister only told me one word: Make it by yourself, if I help you, you won't have learnt it forever. As a beginner, I didn't know how to use the snowshoes and ski poles. So I practiced in a short ski filed. I was very careful all the time, however, I still fell down many times. It was very sore. I really wanted to give up. But when I saw so many people interest it, I told myself that I must learned it and played it very well. After that, I didn’t care about the hurt. I practiced repeating. Finally, I could ski very well. I was very happy. When I stood the formal ski filed, I was very excited. When I was skiing, the feeling was like flying. It made me relaxed, free. That day is memorable for me, I’ll never forget it. It told me one word: Nothing is impossible in the world.
