我一生渴望被人收藏好，妥善安放，细心保存。免我惊，免我苦，免我四下流离，免我无枝可依。可以这样翻译

我一生渴望被人收藏好，妥善安放，细心保存。免我惊，免我苦，免我四下流离，免我无枝可依。可以这样翻译吗？有什么可以改的地方，My whole life I've yearned to be treasured by people, to be put in a safe place, and carefully preserved, avoid being scared, avoid feeling pain, avoid getting lost, avoid having no one to rely on.

整个改为这样可以吗

For my whole life,I've been longing for someone who can treat me kindly,place me safely and look me after carefully.With him,I will never be scared,frustrated,roaming around,or having nobody to depend on.

恩，好多了