求英语大神帮忙看一下这篇英语文章有什么错误 In a long time ago there wa
求英语大神帮忙看一下这篇英语文章有什么错误
In a long time ago there was a large forest on the earth.Jim lived there happily but alone.He had meals by himself and sang songs by himself.No one in his life.
But one day a prince into his life.The prince wanted Jim to help him out of trouble because Jim lived in the forest a long time,he was able to be easy to find a tree that you want in the forest.Although the prince would like to use a lot of treasures to ask him to lead the prince'country to cross the forest but Jim didn't do that because he wouldn't like to go out with people.
After a long time,a boy and a girl came to the forest and lost their way.Jim helped them go home. On the way of the girl and the boy went home,Jim saw a lot of people in the town or the countryside lived sadly.Jim knew people in there was that prince 's country's people,they faced a war,so Jim was worried about them.
Three days later,the prince found Jim again and asked him to lead his country to cross the forest,Jim did that.After three weeks,all people of the country are in the other side of the forest,Jim got back to the forest and lived alone again,and he was ready to help others after this thing.
第一段：
第一句改为：A long time ago.....（In表将来 ago表过去 两者不可连用）
最后一句改为：No one was in his life（原句缺少谓语）
第二段
第一句：.....a prince got into.... （缺少谓语）
第二句：......help him out with...（固定搭配）
第三句：.....the forest for a long time（for引导状语）
第四句：he was able to/could find a tree in the forest that you want easily.
第五句：删去although或but中的一个 use与treasures逻辑搭配不对
还有很多错误...追问
大神求全部错误啊 我性命握于您手
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追答第三段
第三句：On their way went home.，...people living in town and countryside sadly.
第四句...people there were those prince's ....they were facing a war....
第四段
第二句：.....people in the country were in ....
语法错误就这些了
Use ...treasures 这里怎么改
追答use改为give him
追问谢谢谢谢
还在吗
追答？
追问大神能再帮忙指点一篇吗
追答可以是可以 但我语法量不是很大 如果难的话我就有心无力了
追问谢谢谢谢
自我介绍 就是初一的量
追答第四句 ...birthday is April. ..
第五.... 65 kilograms
第二段第一 my hobbies are...
I usually ....listening to music...
最后一段那里an outgoing boy
追问谢谢谢谢🙏
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