急~谁能帮我看看这篇英语作文有哪些语法错误?明天就要用!!如果好的话就加分!

《Harry Potter》读后感
《Harry Potter》is one of the most famous novels in the world. It is a story about a boy named Harry Potter. His parents were gone when he was a baby. So he lived with his uncle and aunt, but they were bad to him. When he was 11 years old he found he was unordinary boy. He was a wizard! He went to a school named Hogwarts School of Witchcraft and Wizardry. He knew that a very dangerous wizard-Voldemort killed a lot of people include his parents. Only Harry Potter could kill Voldemort. If he couldn’t, then Voldemort would kill him. Harry had two good friends in Hogwarts. They were Ron and Hermione .They helped Harry to do lots of difficult thing. A teacher named Dumbledore helped Potter, too. At last Harry Potter killed Voldemort and he lived happily.
I think Harry Potter was brave and kind. He was very helpful. I like him. He fought with the dragon and dived into the river over 1 hour. It causes me very amazing. Hermione and Ron were brave, too. They did lots of things for Harry. I admire them very much. And Dumbledore didn’t have a good family but he was not self-contemptuous. He went to school and learned very hard. He was one of the best wizards in the world but he didn’t be self-satisfied. He was kind and honest. I think it’s not easy. I will learn to him. I like Severus Snape too. In the story he never smiled. Everybody hated him. Harry thought his is a bad man, but he wasn’t. He did lots of things for Dumbledore and Harry but nobody knew until he was dying. I am sad for him and very surprise.
Harry, Voldemort were both orphan, but why the one was kind and the another one was bad? I think the answer is “love”. Harry had love from his friends, Sirius Black, Dumbledore and Mrs. Weasley. He was happy. But Voldemort didn’t have. He was alone. He just wanted to be the king of the world. He didn’t see the other thing. For example friendship, help others…… If he feels that he would be real happy. And I think Voldemort was poor. He didn’t love anyone, include his father. Nobody loved him. His friends hated him. People were afraid of him.
I read the story and know what are love, friendship and familial affection. I like the story very much and I think you will like it too.

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